托福口语高分答题思路对比

　　例题：

　　If a foreign friend of yours is visiting your city. Which part of town would you recommend him or her to see? And why?

　　普通考生答案：

　　If a foreign friend is visiting my city, I would recommend him or her to visit the YU Garden because of the following reasons. First, there are many charming buildings. Some of them were even designed and built like a 100 years ago. Second, there are many local restaurants around and my friend can taste different kinds of delicious food. Last but not least, the place in the center of my town and the transportation to get there is very convenient. To sum up, If a foreign friend is visiting my city, I would recommend him or her to visit the YU Garden.

　　为什么这个答案得不了高分?

　　1. 开头重复原题的句子是一个安全但是比较被动的做法。学霸的答案是要体现出主动而自然的表达;

　　2. 中间的三个理由貌似比较充分但实际上每个理由都存在扩展不充分的问题，结果变成了理由的罗列。学霸的答案重点不是在理由的数量(很多题目在15秒职能想到一个理由)，而是在理由的细节扩展上;

　　3. 结尾的总结貌似让整个答案更加完整，但实际上只是对主题句的完全重复，没有任何意义上的功能。学霸的答案一般会把宝贵的时间花在陈述真正有意义的内容上，即使是总结也需要用更多样化的语言;

　　4. First/second/lastnot not least/to sum up这些过渡语表面上让整个答案有逻辑，实际上会让评分者认为答题者在使用准备好的答题模板，导致被压分。学霸的答案是采用更佳自然的过渡。

　　所以，学霸的答案应该是这样的：

　　I’ll be happy to show my foreign friend the YU Garden which is a beautiful old community loaded with local culture.

　　For one, the architecture there is amazing. I mean some of the buildings were designed and constructed like more than 100 years ago and those can give you a really good sense of history and ancient local culture, the gigantic stone gate decorated with nice-looking patterns,the delicate wooden roof painted with colorful pictures. You name it .

　　Also,tons of local restaurants brings another reason to be there. You can find almost all kinds of local snacks which can never be found anywhere else.

　　Isn't that the perfect place for a foreign friend?