GRE写作满分范文四

"Wisdom is rightfully attributed not to people who know what to look for in life but to people who know what to overlook."

I believe this statement is how you look at a glass of water. Either the glass is half full or it is half empty. The opptimist would look for things in life, whereas the pessimist would try to aviod things in life. This summary will explain how looking for things in life better than overlooking a persons involvement in new opportunities and to learn from these new experiences.

I am strong believer in hands on experiences. If I have a open mind, try new things, and look for new answers to my questions about life, I will in the end gain wisdom because I have experienced many new situations. I plan on becoming a speech language pathologist in the future. In this field I will be dealing with clients who may have a disorder, such as autism or a cognitive delay. I must be aware of the red flags that identify these disorders. I must look for the obvious symptoms before I can overlook anything. If I would in my mind tell my self to overlook things. The result would be detrimental to my career and the individual I am treating.

Who can predict the future? So how can someone purposely overlook an experience in which they may recieve a life lesson or gain knowledge. In conclusion, a person should look at the glass half full. No one can predict the future so how can one know what to overlook. Look for things in life, you may even stumble across that wisdom you were looking for in the first place.

Comments:

This response displays some competence analytic writing since it presents a position on the issue and has a clear pattern of organization.

The opening paragraph introduces the topic and states a position that neither agrees or disagrees completely with the stated claim. The second paragraph presents an example; and the last paragraph provides a clear conclusion. The one example is minimally developed, however, and does not clearly explain "how looking for things in life [is] better than overlooking a person[抅s involvement in new opportunities."

There are numerous small errors and problems in sentence structure (e.g., "If I would in my mind tell my self to overlook things."), but they do not seriously interfere with meaning. Thus, this response meets the criteria for a score of 3.