六级高分作文_健康与财富
健康与财富
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on health and wealth by commenting on the remark, “Health is certainly more valuable than money, because it is by health that money is procured .” You can cite examples to illustrate your point. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.
审题立意
1. 导语解读：要求考生从评论“健康肯定比金钱更重要，因为只有身体健康你才能获得金钱”这一引言入手，就“健康与财富”的话题展开论述。
2. 文章立意：有人认为健康重要，有人认为金钱重要。但两种观点都是片面的。对人们来说，健康和财富都必不可少。因此，关注健康的同时又获取财富才是明智之举。
写作思路
1. 第一段引入引言并阐述其含义：健康比财富更加重要。
2. 第二段论述人们对于健康和财富的不同看法。
3. 第三段表明自己赞成健康更重要的观点，同时对这一观点进行了补充。
参考范文
“Health is certainly more valuable than money, because it is by health that money is procured.” The remark demonstrates the relationship between health and wealth. Meanwhile, it also indicates that health is more important than wealth. 1
So far as this topic is concerned, different people have different opinions about it. 2 Some insist that health play a more important role in our life. They believe that without good health they may never enjoy themselves even if they have a large fortune. If they want to become wealthy, they must keep healthy. 3 On the contrary, some people see more advantages arising from wealth. They think if they have enough money, they can do whatever they want to do, such as buying a big house, expensive car, or beautiful clothes. 3
As far as I am concerned, I am in favor of the former view that health plays a more important role in our life. 4 However, there is no doubt that money is indispensable for everyone; without money we lose the capital to enjoy life. Therefore, we should attach adequate importance to both health and wealth. 5
“健康肯定比金钱更重要，因为只有身体健康你才能获得金钱。”这句话表明了我们健康和财富之间的关系。同时，它也表明了健康比金钱更加重要。
就这个话题来说，不同的人有着不同的见解。一些人坚持认为，健康在我们的生活中发挥着更重要的作用。他们认为，如果没有健康的身体，即使有大笔财富也永远无福消受。如果要变得富有，他们必须保持健康。相反，一些人则更加看重财富的益处。他们认为，如果他们有足够的钱就能做任何想做的事，比如买豪宅、豪车，或是漂亮的衣服。
就我而言，我赞同前一种观点：在我们的生活中，健康更为重要。然而，毋庸置疑，金钱对于每个人而言也是必不可少的；没有金钱，我们就失去了享受生活的资本。因此，我们应该对健康和财富都给予足够的重视。
范文点评
1. 开篇简要评论题目中的引言，同时准确传递出引言的含义：健康比金钱重要。
2. 就健康和财富这一话题展开论述，紧扣作文话题。
3. 阐述两种相对立的观点。
4. 明确表达自己的观点，表示赞同前一种观点。
5. 进一步补充指出健康和财富二者兼顾的重要性。
要点用法
procure v. 获得
fortune n. 财富
on the contrary 相反
arise from 起因于
capital n. 资本
adequate adj. 足够的，充分的
attach importance to 重视
句法点评
1. So far as this topic is concerned, different people have different opinions about it.
此处用到了固定用法：so far as...concerned，意为“就……来说，就……而言”。
2. Some insist that health play a more important role in our life.
此处用到了虚拟语气，insist后跟that从句时，如果insist表示“坚决主张；坚决要求”时，其后由that引导的宾语从句需用虚拟语气，从句中的谓语动词用“should +动词原形”的形式，should可以省略。
3. However, there is no doubt that money is indispensable for everyone.
本句为There is no doubt that...句型，意为“毫无疑问，毋庸置疑……”。
